A kid sat on the steps thinking
He sat and sat wondering what to do
When he saw a light blinking
Now he knew, what to do
He began by taking a light
And looking at it with wonder
He sat there all night
When, who but appeared, but last year’s science teacher
Remember, every project starts with a question
Said the wise old man, who went to make a test
He asked himself, how long does a light last
And he then began his quest
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I'd like it better if it had a fixed number of syllables per line, or perhaps a less random arrangement. Perhaps you could make the rhyming more concrete, "question" and "last" don't rhyme. However, the idea is intriguing and I enjoyed it to some extent.
the first thing is that as you are ending a para then put a fullstop or Q'mark at the end.The word sat was used too often try using a different word.It kind of makes the para boring.
this paragraph needed more puntuations in the three first lines.
now are u ending ur poem here?thats what a reader will ask if u don't put any puntuation at the end.
You need to work on this a bit.You do have the capability.
Keep writing and posting,I would like to read more of ur works.